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my favorite place

Uncategorized — YoonJung on April 3, 2006 at 4:43 pm

I have a favorite place where I used to go to refresh myself when I feel gloomy and depressed. That place is my uncle’s a huge green tea plantation in Bo-sung. This green tea plantation is the most famous in Korea. Whenever I go there fresh leaves of the green tea and thick foliage make my eyes and heart feel comfortable. Also, I can taste the good quality green tea which my uncle picked himself. When I stand om the hill, end of green tea plantation, the sweet breeze is blow to me. These taste really good!! After I go to the Bo-sung, I recovered my composure and even formed motivation – I can do anything. Someday, I’d like to you can gain your experience these lots of pleasure in Bo-sung green tea plantation.

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Wow, I envy you~! Bo-Sung…I want to go there. I only have seen green tea plantation. I like a blue sea. If there is a blue sea, I may go anyWhere. I feel tight thesedays,so I Want to take a trip. However, I have no time. I’m sad.ㅠㅠ

Comment by Lee Ji Eun — April 4, 2006 @ 9:05 pm
Hi there!

I’ve visited Boseong before! It was pretty nice, except that it was a hot day. I didn’t like the green tea bath I tried later, though… it was very salty and not too nice.

Anyway, Yoon Jung, I think it sounds very nice, the tea plantation. You make it sounds like a very refreshing place, and that’s good: it means you wrote the paragraph well.

However, you should take another look at how you’re using articles. I’ll point out a couple of examples:

That place is my uncle’s a huge green tea plantation in Bo-sung.

After I go to the Bo-sung…

Remember:
- “a/an” is the indefinite article: it’s for an uncertain thing, or any thing: “I saw a car parked outside, but I don’t know whose car it was,” or “Give me an orange,”
- “the” is the definite article, and is used for a specific, known object: “Give me the orange on the table,” (when there is only one orange on the table) or “I want to go to the concert” (when everyone knows which concert you mean).
- When we refer to something in the possessive, “My uncle’s ___”, this is really a shorter way of saying something like “the ____ that my uncle owns.” So when we write “my uncle’s ________” we don’t need to include an article, because the possessive already means “the”: “This is my sister’s boyfriend,” or “This is the dog’s food dish.”
Have a look at the other articles in your post and see if you used them correctly!

Comment by mistergord — April 5, 2006 @ 8:56 am

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