spaghetti
Today(Oh, it is over midnight, so Yesterday;;;), I made spaghetti. First I chopped up the vegetable. The vegetable was pimiento, onion, mushroom, tomato and garlic. Second, I boiled the sauce. Third, I boiled the noodle. In the sauce, there was pimiento, onion, mushroom, tomato and garlic. The sauce was delicious and the noodle was delicious too, and I added the noodle and sauce. Last, topped with chees and put it in to microwave oven. It was very delicious. My family said delicious too. I am very glad.
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Oh! Your family is lucky! I think your cooking must have been very good!
Here’s some advice:
1. Repeating a list is probably not necessary. I already know that you chopped up “pimiento, onion, mushroom, tomato and garlic”, so I can guess that those are the vegetables you put in the sauce. You don’t have to repeat the list! Instead, you can mention that you just “put the vegetables into the sauce.
2. Noodle is not uncountable. We pluralize it — noodles — and this affects the verbs. “The noodles were delicious, too.” Sauce is uncountable, but noodles are not.
3. Lastly, be careful not to skip words in your sentences. For example, I know in Korean it’s natural to omit “I” from a sentence, but we don’t usually do it in English. So this sentence,
Last, topped with chees and put it in to microwave oven.
… needs to have a subject and an object added on either side of the verb “topped”. What was topped? Who topped it?
Last, I topped it with chees and put it in to microwave oven.
It’s a small change, but it makes all the difference in the world!