leaving for U.S

Uncategorized — JeongHun.La on April 7, 2006 at 8:16 am

i am on the way to home from university. i got  the message from my friend. she said . she is going to leave for U.S tomorrow. she told me that she only go  there to study for english teacher. i replied to letter. “  I believe that you will become an english teacher. i wanna go to Airport  and say good-bye , but  i will be busy to work and do   my assignment. she is planning to study there for 3 years. i am not sure whether i go abroad to study or not. if it is possible , if i got the lottery. I  will immigrate  country developing social-welfare and education system.

1 Comment

  1. Jeong Hun:

    I have one thing to say, and that is, watch your verb tense.

    When you write, “I am on the way home…” I immediately think, “Wow, he’s writing a post on the subway!” But the next sentence is in past tense: “I got the message…” Most of the rest good in terms of tense — and I’m impressed because you’re using a few different tenses correctly, but the beginning sentence was a little shaky.

    Also: CAPITALIZE words. I know it’s not the fashion on the Internet, but , when practicing writing, please capitalize the words you should. This includes: the pronoun “I”, the first word of every sentence, and all proper names for people, places, countries, languages, or other things with proper names. (The Sixty-Three Building, Samsung, Catholic University, and China are examples of proper names.)

    What do you mean when you write, “I will immigrate country developing social-welfare and education system”? What does “developing” mean? And remember we immigrate “to” places. “I will immigrate to a with ______________? Is that what you mean? Try to make that last sentence clearer.

    Comment by mistergord — April 12, 2006 @ 9:06 pm

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