to bring up a puppy
I’ve raised my puppy for about 8 years. It doesn’t mean just an animal for me, she’s my younger sister and one of my family members. I really hate a few people who are cruel to animal or consider as just their possession. Even though all dogs or puppies have absolutry their feelings and senses, someone doesn’t know about that.
I witnessed a horrible scene that a man dragged a pitiful puppy violently on a street a few days ago. The puppy seemed to be painful and to put it to death. After I watched that situation, the look of puppy reminds me until now. Whenever I see any puppies, they are almost the same like my puppy,so I never forgive the person who gives so much pain to puppy. However, it’s not difficult to find those situations like that in Korea. Many of people desert their puppy with an irresponsibility attitude if they feel sick and tired of it. Actually, the problem of leave puppies behind is emerged from hot issue several days ago. In my opinion, these people don’t have the authority to raise puppies, so I sometimes think that some types of certification about a basis attitude to have a pet is need owing to serious present phase.
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I want to have a puppy. However,I can’t breed that because my house is an apartment. I breeded a chihuahua when I was in middle school. She was very cute, lovely and acted like younest sister.Nevertheless, she went away from us because of apartment’s policy. I was very sad and cried. I felt that affection is so terrible. I live in an apartment as yet. If my family move into a house for rural life, I Will breed puppise~!
I saw a picture some deserted dogs were dead on the road through Internet. How can people so cruel to dogs that lived together once? However, this brutal behavior to animal is not only my country’s problem. I heard that, in France, many people desert their pets on the road in almost every vacances because nowhere to care for pets with cheap cost. After that, most French buy another pets again. I think this bad situations are caused by human egoism.
I agree with Sun Myung: human egotism is very bad for animals. What a horrible scene, Nami! I am glad I didn’t see the man hurting the puppy, becase it would make me very angry.
I want to make sure about a couple of things:
1. “Puppy” means “baby dog”, just like “baby” means a child to the age of about 2 or 3. After 8 years, the dog isn’t a puppy anymore!
It doesn’t mean just an animal for me, she’s my younger sister and one of my family members.
“It doesn’t mean” is a little awkward. She isn’t REALLY your younger sister, so you should use a simile: “She’s not just an animal to me, she’s more like a younger sister and a family member.”
I really hate a few people who are cruel to animal or consider as just their possession.
“a few people” here means you don’t hate all cruel people, only some of them. What you mean is that you hate these people, even if they are rare, right? So you mean that you hate “the few people who are cruel to animal
s. (Remember, animals is plural like anything else when we speak in general terms.)I witnessed a horrible scene that a man dragged a pitiful puppy violently on a street a few days ago.
This sentence is perfect, strong, and powerful. How horrible the scene sounds! Good job!
The puppy seemed to be painful and to put it to death.
The puppy wasn’t painful. The puppy was “in pain”. “Painful” is an adjective for an experience that causes pain, not for the person or animal experiencing the pain.
“The nurse injected me with a needle. The injection was very
painful. I wasin pain.”Many of people desert their puppy with an irresponsibility attitude if they feel sick and tired of it.
“irresponsibilty” is a noun. What you need here is an adjective. What’s the adjective form of this word?
In my opinion, these people don’t have the authority to raise puppies, so I sometimes think that some types of certification about a basis attitude to have a pet is need owing to serious present phase.
The end of this sentence is complicated for no really good reason. KEEP IT SIMPLE!
Can you please try to rewrite it in a less complicated way?
Good job.